“The photographer aimed at making the nation aware of how dumb racist people looked and how blacks and other minorities should work to do as Counts did. This paragraph is a good addition to this essay because it shows the readers a photographer’s perspective, by finding out the intended audience of this photo and the purpose of the picture. One of the major changes of the final essay that I want the readers to notice is the addition of a paragraph between the third paragraph and the fourth paragraph.

These changes and improvements were made after the graded draft was received. There are couple revisions I have made that have a lot of effect in the final version of the essay. It was my first time of writing a photo essay but with a lot of support from the peer editing session and revisions, I was able to piece it in to an organized and a better paper. Also, the great examples of the photo essays that Professor Hahn showed us was a lot of help to me. Through the research, and the analyzation that I have made about the photo, I got to talk about my own thoughts that were related to the issue of the photo. This submitted essay was my first photo essay in my life, and I thought it was very interesting in a fact that I got to analyze a photo and write about the meaning, background, and the message about it. I think the submitted essay, the photo essay, is one of the best works that I have done in many years. From the first outline of the essay, there were many steps that were taken to complete the final version of the essay. The reason why these documents are submitted is that these credentials will not only support this reflective paper, but it will reflect the experience I have gained from this course. In the final portfolio of this course, I decided to submit the rough draft, the graded draft, the revised draft, a peer editing assignment, and an outline of the essay.

Rough draft for essay